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Refugee's Photo by ~Machilin:iconMachilin:

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I want to be the wrinkled photo taken out of a refugee's pocket.

避難民がポケットから出す一枚の皺くちゃの写真に私はなりたい
©2006-2009 ~Machilin
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Tanka, 57577 poetry

Daily Deviation

Given 2006-11-23

Refugee's Photo by ~Machilin. This non-traditional tanka, written originally in Japanese and translated perfectly into English by the author, is a simple but powerful statement about the human condition. With just a few simple words, the poem evokes a complete image, strong with emotion. (Suggested by `MSJames and Featured by `PoeticWar)

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`MSJames Nov 14, 2006, 5:36:57 AM
This is a touching poem, I've read it several times and each time I am just wow'ed at the power of this little piece.

Great job!

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may Beelzebub's scrotum rest firmly on your chin
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~Machilin Nov 14, 2006, 5:40:50 AM
Thank you! This is one of my favorite tanka.
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`MSJames Nov 14, 2006, 6:11:39 AM
I can see why, it is a most excellent poem.

I have many tanka in my gallery, but none as simple and effective as this one.

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may Beelzebub's scrotum rest firmly on your chin
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~Jonathan-Lee Nov 23, 2006, 12:21:22 AM
wait...wtf?

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Art. It's pretty cool shit. [link]
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`cooley Nov 23, 2006, 12:43:41 AM
This is truely beautiful. Thank you for translating it into english and sharing it with us :)

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The one who boasts must boast in the Lord.
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*witchlady750 Nov 23, 2006, 12:43:42 AM
Very lovely, I wish to be that photo as well. Gives a sense of sadness, of longing. Very powerful for such few words. :)

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"Men look at women. Women watch themselves being looked at." - Berger
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~Deathwriter08 Nov 23, 2006, 1:01:14 AM
I love it, +fav

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Life itself is only a vision, a dream. Nothing exists, save for empty space and you.
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~MitchelHunt Nov 23, 2006, 1:20:17 AM
beautiful

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*kaitouace Nov 23, 2006, 3:37:14 AM
touching and beautiful. great job. :heart:

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It would be so perfect
If you would just fall out the window
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~missmidge Nov 23, 2006, 3:54:57 AM
Really nice of choice of words. You give exactly the right amount away, and don't state anything too explicitly. I love the simplicity.

Nice. ^^

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miss midge
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